For the first three days after the god possessed me my ribs and
feet were very stiff and painful owing to the unaccustomed violent movements I had made during the seizure. I soon found that any god, not only Hayama, would come into me, and that this might happen at any time. Once it happened when I was alone on the mountain praying very intensely, and this frightened me so much that I tried not to think of the god when I was alone. Even now it is apt to happen whenever I get overexcited, so I have had to give up going to the shrine or thinking of the god very much. Once when I went on a pilgrimage to Mt Haguro and watched a kagura there, I thought the god was coming into me. But I avoided the attack by taking a firm hold of myself.
When the god comes into me I go into a kind of daze. I don’t
mean to say that I lose consciousness or go out of my mind, but I
don’t see clearly, and what I do is not done by my own will.
Nowadays the god has got rather quieter, but at first he was so
wild and violent that all the skin of my legs would be rubbed off
without my being aware of it.
“I lived without out a computer and cell phone when I was your age.”
yeah well YOUR parents lived without a microwave and the polio vaccine but I don’t see you giving that up
And in some cases, washing machines. Which, after hearing women of my grandmother’s generation talk, may in fact be the most important invention for women of the last century, possibly even exceeding the Pill.
my writing style could best be described as “probably more commas than is entirely necessary”
You use all the fucking punctuation you want to and don’t let anyone tell you differently. Writers are allowed to have their own style of punctuation and English teachers who tell you you’re wrong when it’s technically grammatically correct are narrow-minded cockweasels.
this will be funny to people who have had me proofread stuff.
"house style" clearly means nothing to you backwards-ass fucking hippies.
also as someone who has had marika edit their work: i still have ptsd about semi-colons
There is a quiet beauty to a correctly used semi-colon.
and with marika, there is loud terror in an incorrectly used one
it isn’t necessarily that you use them incorrectly, it is that i would not be surprised if you started using them in place of quotation marks.